Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, T.Donna.
It was a busy Monday, as expected.
There were a lot of patients and clients, especially more new customers than other days.
As you can guess, our revenue of today was good, so that Dr. [Name] looked so happy with that.
And, there was a good news.
New drugstore, which is located in the first floor of our building, began to work today.
It was so helpful; no more complaints about the drugstore.
As I said before, two women pharmacists work in the drugstore and they are so kind and have nice smiles.
I wrote prescriptions in details to help new pharmacists.
After our clinic closed, I visited the drugstore.
They expressed gratitude to me.
I was so glad about it.
Meanwhile, my friends and I checked items for tomorrow\'s camping through Kakao chat.
I am supposed to take a desk and vegetables tomorrow.
Of course, my wife prepared for those things by herself.
I expect we will enjoy tomorrow\'s trip.
What should I do now?
I need to get enough sleep for tomorrow.
See you soon.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Dr. [이름]!
Indeed, it was a very busy Monday. I finished editing a book ready for publishing. Sometimes, I accept jobs for editing. It takes arduous hours to finish but it\'s very satisfying.
Anyway, congratulations for another Monday record breaking profit! I guess, this makes your clinic the best in Incheon. You have made beautiful smiles on people\'s faces. This time, you can make it even better with your partners in the building- the reliable ladies of the drug store. You have great patience in writing down details of the prescription. That is truly admirable. In the Philippines, doctor\'s handwriting can sometimes be hard to read. ^^
All your bags are backed and you and the ladies are ready to camp! One of the best and most important aspects of camping is how it helps you build and strengthen relationships. Simply put, camping is good for you, both in body and mind. I wish you one memorable and happy time with your family and friends.
Finally, just like yesterday, your composition this time contains a couple of grammar suggestions. Continue going a great job in making correct and substantial sentences always.
See you in a few minutes!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
It was a busy Monday, as expected.
>> Correct!
There were a lot of patients and clients, especially more new customers than other days.
>> Correct!
As you can guess, our revenue of today was good, so that Dr. [Name] looked so happy with that.
>> As you can guess, our revenue for today was good, so that Dr. [Name] looked so happy with that.
And, there was a good news.
And, there was a good news.
>> Correct!
New drugstore, which is located in the first floor of our building, began to work today.
>> The new drugstore which is located in the first floor of our building began to work today. (Remove commas.)
It was so helpful; no more complaints about the drugstore.
>> Correct!
As I said before, two women pharmacists work in the drugstore and they are so kind and have nice smiles.
>> Correct!
I wrote prescriptions in details to help new pharmacists.
>> Correct!
After our clinic closed, I visited the drugstore.
>> Correct!
They expressed gratitude to me.
>> Correct!
I was so glad about it.
>> Correct!
Meanwhile, my friends and I checked items for tomorrow\'s camping through Kakao chat.
>> Correct!
Or: Kakao Chat
I am supposed to take a desk and vegetables tomorrow.
>> Correct!
Of course, my wife prepared for those things by herself.
>> Correct!
I expect we will enjoy tomorrow\'s trip.
>> Correct!
What should I do now?
>> Correct!
I need to get enough sleep for tomorrow.
>> Correct!
See you soon.
>> Correct!
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