Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, Donna.
I was totally exhausted.
There are three important things to do until tomorrow.
First, I have to calculate all staff\'s salaries.
Second, I have to calculate our monthly profit.
Third, I have to pay 2022\'s general income tax.
And, I had many problems today.
A phamacist made a mistake, and it made Dr.MJ upset.
Instead of him, I told her about her fault, but she showed me a kind of bad attitude.
Besides, our fax didn\'t work today as if it followed the previous broken scanner.
In addition, one of my patient argued with me.
She wanted me to tell her as she wants; only taking medicine is enough for her disease.
But, I couldn\'t do that, because I thought she should take more treatment to prevent some complications.
One more thing is that the delivery of drying machine will be too late.
The last, I failed to change some reservations for my trip, because the ticket company didn\'t accept my request to change.
Because of bad mood, I will meet my friend and drink some alcohol.
See you.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Dr. [이름]!
By the time you read this, you should have started grabbing a drink. ^^ What a day! The only right thing that happened to you today is perfecting all of your sentences here on this composition. You just had a series of unfortunate events. I hope that the drink will make you feel better.
I think you pretty much did well in your computations and accounting side of work. I guess, when Dr. [Name] gets upset, it really greatly affects the mood in your clinic. Of course, I understand that upholding excellent standards is your top concern that is why Dr. [Name] is irritated by minute mistakes. So, your staff should have just said sorry and kept quiet rather than being defensive about her misconduct.
Meanwhile, demanding patients can really get into your nerves. I realized that I can be so annoying as a patient too sometimes when I recite my symptoms and my own diagnosis to the doctor. ^^ Anyway, doctors know best. I hope that you helped your demanding patient accordingly.
Lastly, your reservations will all be fixed soon. Do not stress and just take one day at a time.
As I said, your day may be tough but your composition shows strength in grammar, style, and content. Congratulations for doing a wonderful job!
See you in the morning.
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
I was totally exhausted.
>> Correct!
There are three important things to do until tomorrow.
>> Correct!
First, I have to calculate all staff\'s salaries.
>> Correct!
Second, I have to calculate our monthly profit.
>> Correct!
Third, I have to pay 2022\'s general income tax.
>> Correct!
And, I had many problems today.
>> Correct!
A phamacist made a mistake, and it made Dr.MJ upset.
>> Correct!
Instead of him, I told her about her fault, but she showed me a kind of bad attitude.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
Besides, our fax didn\'t work today as if it followed the previous broken scanner.
>> Correct!
In addition, one of my patient argued with me.
>> Correct!
She wanted me to tell her as she wants; only taking medicine is enough for her disease.
>> Correct!
But, I couldn\'t do that, because I thought she should take more treatment to prevent some complications.
>> Correct!
One more thing is that the delivery of drying machine will be too late.
>> One more thing is that the delivery of the drying machine will be too late.
The last, I failed to change some reservations for my trip, because the ticket company didn\'t accept my request to change.
>> Correct!
Or: Lastly, I failed to change some reservations for my trip, because the ticket company didn\'t accept my request to change.
Because of bad mood, I will meet my friend and drink some alcohol.
>> Correct!
See you.
>> Correct!
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