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2023-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What popular travel destination do you want to avoid? When I go to domestic travel or overseas travel before, I searched popular place from internet. In the domestic travel case I don\'t go very often popular place. That\'s why there are to many people and a food, an entrance ticket price is ridiculously high. And I think this problem of Korea tour place is the same everywhere. So, these days I am tired of domestic travel. The next case is overseas travel. Actually, I don\'t know it well overseas travel. because, I have not traveled to many countries yet. So, on the other way I try to visit popular place. I think, it was also good experience to visit famous place. But, famous place is crowed place. Therefore, if I go to next trip, I want go to a vacation spot.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What popular travel destination do you want to avoid?

When I go to domestic travel or overseas travel before, I searched popular place from internet.

>> Before, whenever I travel domestically or do an overseas trip, I search for popular places on the internet.

In the domestic travel case I don\'t go very often popular place.

>> When I do domestic trips, I don\'t often go to popular places.

That\'s why there are to many people and a food, an entrance ticket price is ridiculously high.

>> The reason is because there are a lot of people, different kinds of food, and entrance ticket prices are ridiculously high.

And I think this problem of Korea tour place is the same everywhere.

>> I think this problem in Korea\'s tourist places is the same everywhere.

So, these days I am tired of domestic travel.

>> So, these days I feel tired of domestic trips.

The next case is overseas travel.

>> The next case is overseas trips.

Actually, I don\'t know it well overseas travel.

>> Actually, I don\'t know overseas trips well.

because, I have not traveled to many countries yet.

>> That\'s because I have not traveled to many countries yet.

So, on the other way I try to visit popular place.

>> So, on the other way I try to visit popular places.

I think, it was also good experience to visit famous place.

>> I think, it was also a good experience to visit famous places.

But, famous place is crowed place.

>> But, a famous place is a crowed place.

Therefore, if I go to next trip, I want go to a vacation spot.

>> Therefore, if I go on my next trip, I want to go to a vacation spot.

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