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2023-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Q : Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples. A: First of all, it\'s good for a child to have a pet. child can develop a sense of responsibility. And interesting fact, Children raise to pets from six months ago, they reduce the chance of allergies and atopy. It’s not good for a child’s healthy, Children\'s bronchial tubes can be bad because of the hair of their pets. When I looked at the examples above, I thought keeping pets is good for children. Because, This is because pets have more advantages for children.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ji [이름]! Good evening! How are you doing? Thank you for diligently working your homework! I think you express yourself well in writing as well! Have a good one!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

A: First of all, it\'s good for a child to have a pet.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

A child can develop a sense of responsibility.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> Children can develop a sense of responsibility.
And interesting fact, Children raise to pets from six months ago, they reduce the chance of allergies and atopy.
>>> And an interesting fact says children raising pets for six months can reduce the chances of allergies and atopy.
It’s not good for a child’s healthy, Children\'s bronchial tubes can be bad because of the hair of their pets.

>>> It’s not good for the children’s health. Children\'s bronchial tubes can be affected because of the fur of their pets.
When I looked at the examples above, I thought keeping pets is good for children.

>>> CORRECT~!^^
Because, This is because pets have more advantages for children.

>>> It\'s because pets have more advantages for children.

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