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2023-07-28 · 첨삭 강사 Lexie

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Q. What are some of the benefits of traveling? A. The best benefit of traveling is gaining courage. In fact, while childhood to adolescene, I was a introvert and passive person. It was difficult for me to decide or request something, refuse someone\'s ask and say even what I want to do. Especially, I got scared whenever new semester got started in my school. So, When I got my new job, It was extremly stressful. I was conscious of other people\'s gaze and gradually lost my self-confidence. Eventually, I blamed myself frequently. But strangely when I went travel abroad, I felt being free. I enjoyed all of new things. I realized that I\'m good at talking to strangers and I can not be scared even though I face some terrible event. I even enjoyed my mistakes as well. Thanks for a variety of experiences, I believe I have become a courageous person.

강사 첨삭

Hello!


Thank you for accomplishing your homework! This kind of activity helps you to stay on track. Make English speaking and/or writing a daily habit of yours. It only seems impossible until it’s 

done! So have faith you’ll be better. Keep up the good work! I believe in you. See you in class!


Regards,

Teacher Lexie



Q. What are some of the benefits of traveling?

A. The best benefit of traveling is gaining courage.

>> GOOD.

In fact, while childhood to adolescene, I was a introvert and passive person.

>> In fact, during my childhood to adolescence, I was an introvert and a passive person.

It was difficult for me to decide or request something, refuse someone\'s ask and say even what I want to do.

>> It was difficult for me to decide or request something, refuse someone\'s favor, and say things that I wanted to do.

Especially, I got scared whenever new semester got started in my school.

>> I especially got scared whenever a new semester started in my school.

So, When I got my new job, It was extremly stressful.

>>So it was extremely stressful when I got my new job.

I was conscious of other people\'s gaze and gradually lost my self-confidence.

>> GOOD.

Eventually, I blamed myself frequently.

>> GOOD!

But strangely when I went travel abroad, I felt being free.

>> But strangely when I went traveled abroad, I felt free.

I enjoyed all of new things.

>> I enjoyed all of the new things.

I realized that I\'m good at talking to strangers and I can not be scared even though I face some terrible event.

>> I realized that I\'m good at talking to strangers and I don’t get scared even though I face some terrible events.

I even enjoyed my mistakes as well.

>> GOOD.

Thanks for a variety of experiences, I believe I have become a courageous person.

>> Thanks to a variety of experiences, I believe I have become a courageous person.

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