homework
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HOMEWORK for 07/31
Write 5-8 sentences
TOPIC: What do you like and don\'t like about aging?
I think I growing up while I had many experience and when I get order I can do a lot of more than before but if time goes I dont feel doing anything in the first time and after long time very sad to disappear a little peoples around me except for deep relationships.
강사 첨삭
Good day to you, [이름] [이름]! Thank you so much for doing your best in sharing your ideas about this matter. Let\'s continue to work harder in order to make your sentences even more sensible and meaningful. See you in class! ~ T. Marie ^^
I think I growing up while I had many experience >> I think that growing up gives me a lot of experiences.
and when I get order I can do a lot of more than before
>> And when I get older, I can do a lot more than before.
but if time goes I dont feel doing anything in the first time
>> But if the time comes when I don\'t feel like doing anything for the first time,
and after long time very sad to disappear a little peoples around me except for deep relationships.
>> And after a long time, I\'ll feel sad to see some people disappear in my life except for those deep relationships.
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