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2023-08-04 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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Hey. How have you been? I heard that you had a network problem last tuesday. T. Aki proceeded a class intead of you, and I could experience of new type of lesson. I am sorry that I couln\'t make my Wendesday class. At that time, I stayed in Jeon-Ju city which my sister-in-law lives and I forgot to delay my class. My family and my wife\'s families gathered in Nam-won city which brother-in-law\'s parents have a house in country side. Kids enjoyed water play in a large water tube, and adults enjoyed grilled meats and talking. All we had a blast. Now I am so tired though. Recently, there were many things that I had to be concerned about in the clinic. Although there are a lot of work to finish, I am alright because I recharged my energy from a family gathering. Writing task: There are excessive clinics and doctors in Korea. To inform our clinic to many people, we can use a media. I think our signboard is the most attractive way to advertise in our area though. See you tomorrow, if possible.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Dr. [이름]!
There might be a mistake when you wrote this but I let T. Faith read your message for her. Be careful next time so you can address your message to her directly :)
Well, I will just give a few corrections to your composition. Have a good day :)
T. Aki~

I heard that you had a network problem last tuesday.
>>> I heard that you had a network problem last Tuesday.

T. Aki proceeded a class intead of you, and I could experience of new type of lesson.
>>> T. Aki proceeded to do the class instead of you, and I could experience a new type of lesson.

I am sorry that I couln\'t make my Wendesday class.
>>>  I am sorry that I couldn\'t make my Wednesday class.

At that time, I stayed in Jeon-Ju city which my sister-in-law lives and I forgot to delay my class.
>>> At that time, I stayed in Jeon-Ju City where my sister-in-law lives and I forgot to delay my class.

My family and my wife\'s families gathered in Nam-won city which brother-in-law\'s parents have a house in country side.
>>> My family and my wife\'s families gathered in Nam-won City where my brother-in-law\'s parents have a house in the countryside.

Kids enjoyed water play in a large water tube, and adults enjoyed grilled meats and talking.
>>> The kids enjoyed water play in a large water tube, and the adults enjoyed grilled meats and talking.

All we had a blast.
>>> We all had a blast!

Now I am so tired though.
>>> CORRECT!

Recently, there were many things that I had to be concerned about in the clinic.
>>> CORRECT!

Although there are a lot of work to finish, I am alright because I recharged my energy from a family gathering.
>>>  Although there is a lot of work to finish, I am alright because I recharged my energy from a family gathering.

Writing task:
There are excessive clinics and doctors in Korea.
>>> CORRECT!

To inform our clinic to many people, we can use a media.
>>> To inform our clinic to many people, we can use media.

I think our signboard is the most attractive way to advertise in our area though.
>>> CORRECT!




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