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2023-08-14 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Hello, T. Beth. It\'s already past eight pm. Recently, I feel the cool air outside, it means the autumn is coming soon. Did I tell you about my car? I have a convertible car, red colored, branded BMW. My favorite color is red, and I really enjoy driving my car without the roof. I couldn\'t open the roof of my car in the past 2 months because it was too hot outside. However, I did that today on my way home. It was still warm outside, but I couldn\'t stand the desire of it. There is a news in the clinic. A new staff who applied for a counselling manager came to our clinic this morning. She looked so pretty and kind. I heard that she was a flight attendant in the past, and she showed us very polite greeting. It was impressive. I hope that she will get used to our clinic soon. Writing task: Maybe you know that most koreans love high speed at any time. That\'s why our internet speed is highest in the world. I think that a novel technology usually get us away from hesistancy. See you tomorrow.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Dr. [이름]. That\'s a nice car you have there. It would definitely be nice to drive it when the weather is nice outside. 
I hope the new counseling manager will be a good additional to your team. See you in class!

Hello, T. Beth.
>>>   correct
It\'s already past eight pm.
>>>   correct
Recently, I feel the cool air outside, it means the autumn is coming soon.
>>> correct  
Did I tell you about my car?
>>> correct   
I have a convertible car, red colored, branded BMW.
>>> correct
>>> OR: I have a convertible BMW car, red colored.
My favorite color is red, and I really enjoy driving my car without the roof.
>>> correct  
I couldn\'t open the roof of my car in the past 2 months because it was too hot outside.
>>> correct  
However, I did that today on my way home.
>>> correct  
It was still warm outside, but I couldn\'t stand the desire of it.
>>> OR: It was still warm outside, but I couldn\'t stand the desire to do it.  
There is a news in the clinic.
>>> correct    
A new staff who applied for a counselling manager came to our clinic this morning.
>>> A new staff who applied for the position of a counselling manager came to our clinic this morning.  
>>> OR: A new staff who applied as a counselling manager came to our clinic this morning.
She looked so pretty and kind.
>>> correct   
I heard that she was a flight attendant in the past, and she showed us very polite greeting.
>>>  I heard that she was a flight attendant in the past, and she showed us a very polite greeting. 
>>> OR: I heard that she was a flight attendant in the past, and she greeted us very politely.
It was impressive.
>>>  correct     
I hope that she will get used to our clinic soon.
>>>  correct   
Writing task:
Maybe you know that most Koreans love high speed at any time.
>>> correct
>>> OR: As you may already know, most Koreans love a fast speed at any time.  
That\'s why our internet speed is highest in the world.
>>> ORThat\'s why our internet speed is best in the world.   
I think that a novel technology usually get us away from hesistancy.
>>> I think that a novel technology usually gets us away from hesitancy.   
See you tomorrow.
>>>  correct 

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