Homework
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Essay Question: What fun activities can you enjoy with your family at home?
There are many activities that my family enjoy together at home. First, we love watching TV. Every Saturday, we gather and watch a comedy program named ‘1 night 2 days’ while eating dinner. Second, we sometimes play card game. I love playing card game a lot that I made some cards by myself. Last, we also enjoy playing \'omok\', which is a game who complete 5 succession wins the game.
About my debate topic
I have a debate competition tomorrow that my school operates. The topic is ‘Should the government restrict hate speech?’. The agreement and opposition will be decided randomly tomorrow, so I prepared reasons for both agreement and opposition. Restricting hate speech can guarantee the social minorities’ rights. There are many examples of restricting hate speech such as in Japan and America, etc. However, it can violate the freedom of expression and suppress the people who have different political believes.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] A!
Thank you for answering your homework!
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Here are some things to take note of:
1. There are many activities that my family enjoy together at home.
>>CORRECT!
2. First, we love watching TV.
>>CORRECT!
3. Every Saturday, we gather and watch a comedy program named ‘1 night 2 days’ while eating dinner.
>>CORRECT!
4. Second, we sometimes play card game.
>>Second, we sometimes play a card game.
5. I love playing card game a lot that I made some cards by myself.
>>I love playing card games a lot that I made some cards by myself.
6. Last, we also enjoy playing \'omok\', which is a game who complete 5 succession wins the game.
>>Last, we also enjoy playing \'omok\', a game which whoever completes 5 successions wins.
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1. I have a debate competition tomorrow that my school operates.
>>I have a debate competition that my school operates tomorrow.
2. The topic is ‘Should the government restrict hate speech?’.
>>CORRECT!
3. The agreement and opposition will be decided randomly tomorrow, so I prepared reasons for both agreement and opposition.
>>CORRECT!
4. Restricting hate speech can guarantee the social minorities’ rights.
>>CORRECT!
5. There are many examples of restricting hate speech such as in Japan and America, etc.
>>There are many examples of restricting hate speech in countries like Japan and America, etc.
6. However, it can violate the freedom of expression and suppress the people who have different political believes.
>>However, it can violate the freedom of expression and suppress the people who have different political beliefs.
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