Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Please tell me about your favorite occasion
My favorite occasion is new year\'s day because there are a lot of event.
First, we go to beach or top of mountain and make New Year\'s wishes.
Next, we make rice cake soup and eat that. this mean is we get one age.
Finally, we play traditional games with our family and it is very fun.
강사 첨삭
I could also feel the happiness and excitement you have on New Year\'s Day, [이름]! You made it look that it is something we should look forward to. -Faith-
Please tell me about your favorite occasion>> Please tell me about your favorite occasion.
My favorite occasion is new year\'s day because there are a lot of event.
>> My favorite occasion is New Year\'s Day because there are many events.
First, we go to beach or top of mountain and make New Year\'s wishes.
>> First, we go to a beach or top of a mountain and make New Year\'s wishes.
Next, we make rice cake soup and eat that. this mean is we get one age.
Next, we make rice cake soup and eat that. this mean is we get one age.
>> Next, we make rice cake soup and eat that because this means we get an additional one year for our age.
Finally, we play traditional games with our family and it is very fun.
Finally, we play traditional games with our family and it is very fun.
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