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Of course, alcohol is a drink that is often consumed but should be avoided. Since I first drank alcohol in my late teens, there has been no drink as delicious as alcohol. I think I spent my 20s drinking. Fortunately, my liver was detoxified well, so alcohol suited me well. In my 30s, after giving birth, my body deteriorated rapidly, I started getting drunk and making mistakes, and I started drinking less. In my 40s, I only drink on weekends for my health.
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Eliana!
I know that drinking alcohol is one of the Korean strong culture. I am glad that you are trying to avoid this because it could really affect your body especially if you consume too much.
In my case, I never tried drinking alcohol because I grew up in a neighborhood of drunkards and I saw their lives when they got drunk. I promised myself that I wouldn\'t drink alcohol because I might unconsciously be like them.
Have a good holiday!
Aki~
Of course, alcohol is a drink that is often consumed but should be avoided.
>>> CORRECT!
Since I first drank alcohol in my late teens, there has been no drink as delicious as alcohol.
>>> CORRECT!
I think I spent my 20s drinking. Fortunately, my liver was detoxified well, so alcohol suited me well.
>>> CORRECT!
In my 30s, after giving birth, my body deteriorated rapidly, I started getting drunk and making mistakes, and I started drinking less.
>>> CORRECT!
In my 40s, I only drink on weekends for my health.
>>> In my 40s, I only drink on weekends for my health.
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