Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
We have many kind of festival.
It develops a local economy.
But some festival need to be careful
as river, hero.
People don’t take part in this program.
They have to be changed or abolish.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]ny!
I love festivals but these days, festivals are commercialized instead of enjoying them, we tend to be indignant due to the crowd and some merchandise is no longer related to the festival. See you later!
Aki~
We have many kind of festival.
>>> We have many kinds of festivals.
It develops a local economy.
>>> CORRECT!
But some festival need to be careful as river, hero.
>>>But some festivals need to be careful as the river, hero.
People don’t take part in this program.
>>> CORRECT!
They have to be changed or abolish.
>>> They have to be changed or abolished
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