Homework
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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> Which places in the world do you think are too dangerous to visit? Why are they dangerous
In my opinion, Korea is quite safety country, but unlike ordinary domestic, the place that I\'ve been during my military service is really dangerous. We call it \'DMZ - Demilitarized Zone\'. It\'s the boundary place between north and south Korea. I was a ranger soldier and our mission is protect that area. In DMZ ,it\'s dangerous because there are possibilities that are encountering our enemies who are North Korean soldier, and there are unknown underground bomb or trap. So we never lose our attention during entering that area.
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Which places in the world do you think are too dangerous to visit? Why are they dangerous
In my opinion, Korea is quite safety country, but unlike ordinary domestic, the place that I\'ve been during my military service is really dangerous.
>> Personally, I think Korea is quite a safe nation, but unlike ordinary places in the country, the area where I\'ve been assigned to during my military service is really dangerous.
We call it \'DMZ - Demilitarized Zone\'. It\'s the boundary place between north and south Korea.
>> We call it the (Demilitarized Zone (DMZ). It\'s the boundary between North and South Korea.
I was a ranger soldier and our mission is protect that area.
>> I was a ranger and our mission was to protect that area.
In DMZ ,it\'s dangerous because there are possibilities that are encountering our enemies who are North Korean soldier, and there are unknown underground bomb or trap.
>> The DMZ is dangerous because there are possibilities that we can encounter our enemies who are North Korean soldiers, and there are unknown underground bombs or traps.
So we never lose our attention during entering that area.
>> So we never lose our focus when entering that area.
>> or: That\'s why we always pay attention when we are in that area.
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