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A hobby is having time just for yourself. When you focus on your inner interests and take the time to enjoy them, you gain peace of mind and feel satisfied, which gives you vitality in your work and life.
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Hi again, Eliana!
Your diligence is highly appreciated. You are one of those students who love doing your homework. Keep it up, all your effort you do gives way to your great improvement.
Aki~
A hobby is having time just for yourself.
>>> Having a hobby means having time to yourself. It\'s a way to relax, unwind, and do something you enjoy
When you focus on your inner interests and take the time to enjoy them, you gain peace of mind and feel satisfied, which gives you vitality in your work and life.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> When you take the time to focus on your inner interests and enjoy them, you gain peace of mind and satisfaction. This leads to vitality in both your work and personal life.
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