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2023-10-25 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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The reason why I should know about challenges in the hotel industry is that I would like to be expert. I enjoy having experience in the hotel industry as a challenge. The more I have experience, the better I can take care of every situation. Whenever I challenge something , it feels like I enjoy my own life. Chammy, I really like to talk with you every morning, because it is so helpful for my English interview this December. I should have started with you earlier. I usually watch video taken with you everyday and realized what is wrong with my attitude when speaking something. So I attached some memo next to my laptop which is written like this. 1. Don\'t twist your body when you speak. 2. Stop moving your eyes when you speak. I think your attitude is really natural. I would like to follow your action and keep trying it. Thanks.

강사 첨삭

I just completely read your composition after our class. Your reason was good! I guess you have explained the answer further. One thing you need to show is your sincerity and that you are really into your words as you speak them.

PS: Gesture or movements during conversation is not bad it is understandable in some situations. Honestly, we cannot avoid that. We just need to make sure that our movements are appropriate to what we are saying. It is used to reinforce or emphasize what we are saying and also offer information about emotions and attitudes. 
-Chammy
The reason why I should know about challenges in the hotel industry is that I would like to be expert.

>> The reason why I should know about challenges in the hotel industry is that I would like to be an expert.

OR

>>As a hotel employee the reason why, I should know the challenges in the hotel industry is to be an expert in handling possibilities. 

I enjoy having experience in the hotel industry as a challenge.

>>Correct

OR

>>I enjoy taking experiences in the hotel industry as a challenge. 

The more I have experience, the better I can take care of every situation.

>>Correct

OR

>> The more experience I have, the better I can take care of every situation.

Whenever I challenge something, it feels like I enjoy my own life.

>>Correct

OR

>> In fact, whenever I feel challenged by something, the more I enjoy my life. 


Chammy,
I really like to talk with you every morning, because it is so helpful for my English interview this December.
>>Correct
I should have started with you earlier.
>>Correct
I usually watch video taken with you everyday and realized what is wrong with my attitude when speaking something.
>>I usually watch videos taken with you every day and realize what is wrong with my attitude when speaking about something.
So I attached some memo next to my laptop which is written like this.
1. Don\'t twist your body when you speak.
2. Stop moving your eyes when you speak.
>>Correct
I think your attitude is really natural.
I would like to follow your action and keep trying it.
Thanks.
>>Correct

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