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2023-10-26 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Why do you think people drink alcoholic drinks? In my opinion, the reason why there are many people drink alcoholic because, alcoholic to fill the empty atmosphere. Sometimes, I feel empty atmosphere when I eat meal with my friends, family or alone. So some people want to fill this atmosphere use to alcohol. Or, their drink to raise the mood. Because when we get drunk, it usually turns passionate. I think that\'s why many people look for alcohol for the atmosphere. But, I think it\'s only good when we drink in moderation.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

>> In my opinion, the reason why there are many people who drink alcoholic beverages is because alcohol fills empty atmosphere.

Sometimes, I feel empty atmosphere when I eat meal with my friends, family or alone.

>> Sometimes, I feel an empty atmosphere when I eat meal with my friends, family or alone.

So some people want to fill this atmosphere use to alcohol.

>> So some people want to fill this atmosphere with the help of alcohol.

Or, their drink to raise the mood.

>> Or, they drink to raise the mood.

Because when we get drunk, it usually turns passionate.

>> It\'s because when we get drunk, we suddenly become passionate.

I think that\'s why many people look for alcohol for the atmosphere.

>> CORRECT!

But, I think it\'s only good when we drink in moderation.

>> CORRECT!

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