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2023-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the advantages of being a workaholic? I think the positive side of workaholic are the efficiency and quality of work. The reason I think so is that not workaholic people want to finish the quickly work. But, workaholic people think they are more good quality because they have interested in work. So some workaholic people respected to in their companies. But in my opinion, I think it\'s not a good think to fall into the work too much. It\'s important to work for we are company. But, I think we don\'t have to neglect health and relationship with around people because work.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages of being a workaholic?

I think the positive side of workaholic are the efficiency and quality of work.
>> I think the positive sides of being a workaholic are the efficiency and quality of work.
The reason I think so is that not workaholic people want to finish the quickly work.
>> The reason I think is that non-workaholic people want to finish the work quickly.
But, workaholic people think they are more good quality because they have interested in work.
>> But, workaholic people think they are better because they are interested in working.
So some workaholic people respected to in their companies.
>> So some workaholic people are well-respected in their companies.
But in my opinion, I think it\'s not a good think to fall into the work too much.
>> But in my opinion, I think it\'s not a good idea to fall into the work too much.
It\'s important to work for we are company.
>> It\'s important to work for the company.
But, I think we don\'t have to neglect health and relationship with around people because work.
>> But, I think we don\'t have to neglect health and relationship with the people around us because work.

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