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2023-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jade

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: What motivated you to start working at McDonald\'s in the first place? I paused my university until next March. It means I have a lot of free time. I would like find a part time job that I could work more than 4 hours. Somehow, normal part time job in my village works less than 4 hours. Once in a while, one of my friends who works at McDonald\'s told me that \"You could work more than 4 hours at McDonald\'s.\" then I decided to apply for McDonald\'s.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]. That\'s great! Your decision to work at McDonald\'s to make the most of your free time and earn a part-time income shows your determination and practical thinking. That\'s commendable. Thanks for doing your homework!
~T. Jade^^
Homework: What motivated you to start working at McDonald\'s in the first place?
I paused my university until next March. 
>> Correct
It means I have a lot of free time. 
>> Correct
I would like find a part time job that I could work more than 4 hours. 
>> I would like to find a part-time job that I could work for more than 4 hours.
Somehow, normal part time job in my village works less than 4 hours. 
>> Somehow, normal part-time jobs in my village offer less than 4 hours of work.
Once in a while, one of my friends who works at McDonald\'s told me that, \"You could work more than 4 hours at McDonald\'s.\" 
>> Correct
then I decided to apply for McDonald\'s.
>> Then I decided to apply to McDonald\'s.

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