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2023-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the bad things about fashion? I think fashion has a lot of interesting. Because the design and shape of clothes change according to new trend. And also interesting point is the fashion trend is different depending on the region. But I think there is unfortunate about fashion. Many people don\'t want to fall behind the trend. So many people buy a lot of clothes every season. But, fashion trends is fast, so follow the trend\'s people don\'t wear a out of trend clothes. So it\'s overspend money or there is environmental issues. Some fashion brands don\'t sell last season clothes at a discount. Instead, they burn the clothes because of their brand value.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille



~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the bad things about fashion?

I think fashion has a lot of interesting.
>> I think fashion has a lot of interesting points.
OR >> I think fashion is really interesting.
Because the design and shape of clothes change according to new trend.
>>  It\'s because the design and shape of clothes change according to new trends.
And also interesting point is the fashion trend is different depending on the region.
>> Another interesting point is that the fashion trends differ depending on the region.
But I think there is unfortunate about fashion.
>> But I think there is an unfortunate thing about fashion.
Many people don\'t want to fall behind the trend.
>> CORRECT!
So many people buy a lot of clothes every season.
>> CORRECT!
But, fashion trends is fast, so follow the trend\'s people don\'t wear a out of trend clothes.
>> But, fashion trends go by so fast, so people have to follow the trend since they don\'t wear out-of-trend clothes.
So it\'s overspend money or there is environmental issues.
>> So there\'s overspending or another environmental issue.
Some fashion brands don\'t sell last season clothes at a discount.
>> CORRECT!
Instead, they burn the clothes because of their brand value.
>> CORRECT!

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