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2012-04-12 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Hi Daniel, My name is [Name]. This is [Name] friend Jason. He's 12. His sister is nine. His pet is a budgie.Its name is Dickens.Jason and I go to the same school. There are 450 boys and girls in our school.Jason's form teacher is Mrs. [Name]. She has got a pet, too. Her pet is a tortoise. Our form teacher is Mr. [Name]. I like his lessons. He has two dogs.The dogs love to play in his garden. Now I have a question for you. What's your pet? Yours,John Happy Easter~ When I heard your Eeaster, I envied you and I became curious about your country. Specially, I wondered the parade. My country is not Catholic. So we don't have a ceremony for Easter. Not to go to work is the reason why it's just Sunday. Of course, we prepared Holy Saturday mass. We also prepare a candle in the mass. That's all. During the mass, I heard the sound of breaking cup candle even 5 times. Our mass was not pious and our priest's sermon was very boring. I want to stay at the Catholic country next Easter.

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Hello Miss. [Name], I missed reading your composition, I haven\'t read some of your compositions for 4 days including the weekend, kkkk..^^ By the way, two thumbs up for you my dear for writing a very good composition as always.. ANd if you want to experience Easter in a Catholic country, you can visit our country and I will be your tour guide,kkk.. That would be 100 dollars a day for being a tour guide okay?kkkk... Just kidding!! I\'ll talk to you agian later Miss. [Name], I already miss you..:) Teacher Cam^^ Hi Daniel,My name is [Name]. >>correct This is [Name] friend Jason. >>correct  He\'s 12. His sister is nine. >>correct His pet is a budgie.Its name is Dickens. >>correct Jason and I go to the same school. >>correct There are 450 boys and girls in our school. >>correct Jason\'s form teacher is Mrs. [Name]. >>correct She has got a pet, too. >>correct Her pet is a tortoise. >>correct Our form teacher is Mr. [Name]. >>correct I like his lessons. He has two dogs. >>correct The dogs love to play in his garden. >>correct Now I have a question for you. What\'s your pet? >>correct  Yours,John>>correctHappy Easter~ >>correct When I heard your Eeaster, I envied you and I became curious about your country.>>correct (Easter) Specially, I wondered the parade. >>Specially, I wondered about the procession. >>Procession is similar with a parade but it\'s more solemn.. :)My country is not Catholic. So we don\'t have a ceremony for Easter. >>correctNot to go to work is the reason why it\'s just Sunday. >>Last Sunday was special because we didn\'t go to work.Of course, we prepared Holy Saturday mass. >>correct We also prepare a candle in the mass. That\'s all. >>We also prepared some candles for the mass and that\'s all. During the mass, I heard the sound of breaking cup candle even 5 times. >>During the mass, I heard the sound of the broken candle glass for 5 minutes.  Our mass was not pious and our priest\'s sermon was very boring. >>correctI want to stay at the Catholic country next Easter. >>I want to experience Easter in a Catholic country next year.

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