Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I think ‘Learning’ is the most important thing in our life. Now we are in an information-oriented society. So, to not being eliminated from the society, we have to learn. Also, humans should work to live a life. However, we need money for living. Therefore, I think ‘Learning’ is important to earn money. Of course there are many jobs which don’t need knowledges, but a large-income learner always try to learn.
강사 첨삭
Hi Lina!
Good work on your essay homework.
You were able to show good comprehension of my question by providing a relevant answer.
You can improve your writing by using key vocabulary and/or summarizing the major ideas in your own words.
Overall, you did well in your composition.
Good job Lina! :)
- Teacher Mari
I think ‘learning’ is the most important thing in our lives.
Now we are in an information-oriented society.
CORRECT!
OR >> We now live in a society that values information.
So, to not being eliminated from the society, we have to learn.
So, to not be eliminated from society, we have to learn.
Also, humans should work to live a life. However, we need money for living.
Also, humans should work to live a life. However, we need money to live.
Therefore, I think ‘Learning’ is important to earn money.
Therefore, I think ‘learning’ is important to earn money.
Of course there are many jobs which don’t need knowledges, but a large-income learner always try to learn.
Of course, many jobs don’t require knowledge, but a large-income learner always tries to learn.
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