Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Children grow up playing and are happy.
I think kids these days don\'t have enough time to play outside.
If you don\'t spend too much time on your phone.
Because there is a lot of useful information on the phone.
강사 첨삭
Hi Mia! Well done. ^^ Thank you for answering the homework. Indeed, there is a lot of useful information on the phone and we should manage our time on using it.
-Khai
Children grow up playing and are happy.>> CORRECT
OR
>> Children are happy when they play while growing up.
I think kids these days don\'t have enough time to play outside.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> These days, kids don\'t have enough time to play outside.
If you don\'t spend too much time on your phone.
Because there is a lot of useful information on the phone.
>> There is a lot of useful information on the phone, but it is not good to spend too much time using it.
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