Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I think students don\'t need to get after-school jobs. because the students will tired when they work at the after-school jobs. They are busy to study in their school. However if the students want to get them, it is a good chance for them.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Henry! Totally get your point about students and after-school jobs. It\'s a tricky balance, right? I think it can be a cool chance for personal growth if they\'re up for it. Just have to make sure it doesn\'t burn them out. What do you reckon?
Anyhow, good job on this homework!
~ Teacher Maxine
I think students don\'t need to get after-school jobs.
>> I think students don\'t need to take on after-school jobs.
because the students will tired when they work at the after-school jobs.
>> It\'s because students will be tired when they work at after-school jobs.
They are busy to study in their school.
>> They are busy studying in school.
However if the students want to get them, it is a good chance for them.
>> However, if the students want to take on after-school jobs, it could be a good opportunity for them.
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