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Q: Do you want to try some games and have it as your source of income? Why or why not?
A: I think I would have a lot of fun if I have it as a job, but I think it won\'t be that good for my health.
Actually, I can just exercise everyday and keep my health good even if I have gaming as a job, but I think it\'s not that easy to do it.
Also, I think I won\'t go outside a lot if I have it as a job, so for my relationship with others, not having it as as a job is better.
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2. Actually, I can just exercise everyday and keep my health good even if I have gaming as a job, but I think it\'s not that easy to do it.
3. Also, I think I won\'t go outside a lot if I have it as a job, so for my relationship with others, not having it as as a job is better.
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1. I think I would have a lot of fun if I have it as a job, but I think it won\'t be that good for my health.
>>CORRECT!
2. Actually, I can just exercise everyday and keep my health good even if I have gaming as a job, but I think it\'s not that easy to do it.
>>I can just exercise every day and keep my health good even if I have gaming as a job, but I think it\'s not that easy to do it.
3. Also, I think I won\'t go outside a lot if I have it as a job, so for my relationship with others, not having it as as a job is better.
>>Also, I think I won\'t go outside a lot if I have it as a job, so as for my relationship with others, not having it as a job is better.
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