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2024-01-25 · 첨삭 강사 Maxine

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I\'m agree with Scott\'s opinion. Because cell phone can make people addicted on their phone. So they can watch their phones a lot of time. I tell my story when I do my homework if I have my cell phone I can\'t focus on my homework. Because I want to watch Youtube or play games more than do homework. They are so fun. Not only them but also SNS like Instargram, Facebook, Twiter.

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Hello, Henry!
I totally get that! Phones can be so distracting, especially with all the fun apps and social media. Do you have tips on how you manage to stay on track? ^^
~ Teacher Maxine

I\'m agree with Scott\'s opinion. Because cell phone can make people addicted on their phone. 
>> I agree with Scott\'s opinion because cell phones can lead to addiction.

So they can watch their phones a lot of time. 
>> So people end up spending a lot of time on their phones.

I tell my story when I do my homework if I have my cell phone I can\'t focus on my homework. 
>> I can relate; when I have my cell phone while doing homework, I struggle to stay focused.

Because I want to watch Youtube or play games more than do homework. 
>> I find myself wanting to watch YouTube or play games instead of doing homework.

They are so fun. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They\'re just so much fun.

Not only them but also SNS like Instargram, Facebook, Twiter.
>> Not only those, but social media platforms like Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter as well.

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