Homework
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My childhood hobby was Jewelry Cross.
It\'s because I have good concentration and I can put down a lot of thoughts for a while.
My eyes get bad, but it\'s still really fun to try.
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What were your hobbies when you were younger? Why did you have those hobbies? Were they fun? Why or why not?
My childhood hobby was Jewelry Cross.
>> My childhood hobby was playing Jewelry Cross. [This is the correction if Jewelry Cross is a video or online game.]
>> OR: I enjoyed making jewelry crosses when I was younger. [This is the correction if Jewelry Cross is arts and crafts.]
NOTE: Is Jewelry Cross a video game or is it arts and crafts? I don\'t know what Jewelry Cross is so it\'s hard to correct the sentence. The corrections above are just possibilities.
It\'s because I have good concentration and I can put down a lot of thoughts for a while.
>> It\'s because I have good concentration, and can clear my mind and focus on what I\'m doing.
My eyes get bad, but it\'s still really fun to try.
>> This hobby caused me to have bad eyesight, however, it was very fun to try.
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