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Sleeping well is important to manage my health.
But I don’t like to sleep a lot for beauty.
sleeping for 8days is a disease .
It can be hurt their health.
They had better manage their beauty to the other ways.
Such as food or exercises .
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]ny!
Sleep is one of the most important things our body needs. It is more important than food and water. However, anything in excess is no longer normal, I hope that scientists can discover medicines that can help people who have these kinds of diseases.
Have a great Wednesday!
T. Aki~
Sleeping well is important to manage my health.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> Getting enough sleep is important for my health.
But I don’t like to sleep a lot for beauty.
>>> CORRECT!
sleeping for 8 days is a disease .
>>> CORRECT!
It can be hurt their health.
>>> It can damage their health.
They had better manage their beauty to the other ways.
>>> They had better manage their beauty in other ways.
Such as food or exercises .
>>> Such as food or exercise.
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