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My happy memory...
First, on March 28th last year, I became a family with Marong. At that time, Marong was a two-month-old puppy, and she was pretty like an angel. Marong always brings laughter to my family.
Second, I have two older sisters and we save 150,000 won (112.74 dollars) a month. The purpose of saving money is to go on a trip with us and my mom. We went on a trip to Jeju last year with the money we collected. It was special because it was my first trip with my two older sisters and my mom.
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Thank you for sharing a happy memory, Mia. ^^ I think your mom really appreciates what you’ve done for her. ^^
-Khai
My happy memory...
>> My Happy Memory
First, on March 28th last year, I became a family with Marong.>> First, on March 28th last year, Marong became part of the family.
At that time, Marong was a two-month-old puppy, and she was pretty like an angel.
>> Marong was two months old during that time, and she was pretty like an angel.
Marong always brings laughter to my family.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> Marong always brings happiness to my family.
Second, I have two older sisters and we save 150,000 won (112.74 dollars) a month.>> Second, I have two older sisters, and we save 150,000 won (112.74 dollars) a month.
The purpose of saving money is to go on a trip with us and my mom.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> The purpose of saving money is to have a budget to go on a trip with our mom.
We went on a trip to Jeju last year with the money we collected.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> We went to Jeju Island using the money that we collected.
It was special because it was my first trip with my two older sisters and my mom.
>> CORRECT
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