homework
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are some popular diets or eating trends in your country? Do you think they are effective?
Until recently, \"ketogenic diet\" are very trends for lose weight.
But, I think this kinds of diets, it\'s something wrong in Korea compared to other countries.
Originally, ketogeni-dieter eat salad, eggs, and small peace of meat.
However, in the case of Koreans who did ketogeni, they didn\'t eat carbohydrates such as rice, noodles, and bread.
But, they ate mainly meat such as pork belly, chicken, and fried food.
So, as a result I hear no one succese stories.
Actually, this diet trend was created by celebrities.
And the reason why so many people go on a lose weight or diet is influenced by the media.
Obesity is a problem, but excessive underweithgt is also problem.
Ths problem is many students and teenagers want to have an idol\'s body.
This is why teenagers think that celebrities fashion and body shape are standard of beauty.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are some popular diets or eating trends in your country? Do you think they are effective?
Until recently, \"ketogenic diet\" are very trends for lose weight.
Please answer the question:
What are some popular diets or eating trends in your country? Do you think they are effective?
Until recently, \"ketogenic diet\" are very trends for lose weight.
>> Recently, \"ketogenic diet\" was quite a trend for losing weight.
But, I think this kinds of diets, it\'s something wrong in Korea compared to other countries.
>> But, I think there\'s something wrong with this kind of diet in Korea compared to other countries.
Originally, ketogeni-dieter eat salad, eggs, and small peace of meat.
>> Originally, ketogenic-dieters eat salads, eggs, and small pieces of meat.
However, in the case of Koreans who did ketogeni, they didn\'t eat carbohydrates such as rice, noodles, and bread.
>> However, in the case of Koreans who did ketogenic diet, they didn\'t eat carbohydrates such as rice, noodles, and bread.
But, they ate mainly meat such as pork belly, chicken, and fried food.
>> But, they mainly eat meat such as pork belly, chicken, and fried food.
So, as a result I hear no one succese stories.
>> So, as a result, I heard no one who had successful stories.
Actually, this diet trend was created by celebrities.
>> CORRECT!
And the reason why so many people go on a lose weight or diet is influenced by the media.>> And the reason why so many people lose weight or do diet is because of the influence of social media.
Obesity is a problem, but excessive underweithgt is also problem.
>> Obesity is a problem, but excessive underweight is also problem.
Ths problem is many students and teenagers want to have an idol\'s body.
>> Ths problem happens to many students and teenagers who want to have an idol\'s body.
This is why teenagers think that celebrities\' fashion and body shape are standards of beauty.
>> CORRECT!
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