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학생이 쓴 원문
I went to Jeju last year with my climb crew members. Jeju is one of Korea\'s popular tourist attractions. I\'ve been there a few times, But it was my first scuba diving experience. After It\'s rained we arrived in there. So you know the water was a little cloudy and there wasn\'t fish much. If I have chance, I wanna go to beautiful place and scuba diving!
강사 첨삭
Hi Su!
Thank you for sharing your experience. I\'m sure you had so much fun in Jeju. I heard it is such a beautiful place. Let\'s talk more about it later in class ^^
-Teacher Ash
I went to Jeju last year with my climb crew members.
>> I went to Jeju last year with my climbing crew members.
Jeju is one of Korea\'s popular tourist attractions.
>>CORRECT
I\'ve been there a few times, But it was my first scuba diving experience.
>> I\'ve been there a few times, but it was my first-time trying scuba diving.
After It\'s rained, we arrived in there.
>> It stopped raining when we arrived there.
So you know the water was a little cloudy and there wasn\'t fish much.
>> So, you know the water was cloudy and there weren\'t many fish.
If I have chance, I wanna go to beautiful place and scuba diving!
>> If I have the chance to visit Jeju, I will go scuba diving again.
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