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Do you think Koreans generally look better today than when cosmetic surgery wasn't as common?
I think each race has a own beauty. For example, european has a bloned hair and big nose, filipino has a big eyes and brown skin, korean has a round face and black hair. It is a very characteristic beauty in the world.
But, because of the plastic surgery, Korean women have been losing their own beauty. Of course, their are a lot of beautiful women on the street. They are so pretty but have a same face: sharply chin, big eyes and high nose...They think they are so pretty. But I think they just follow europeans beauty. Point of europeans view, these kind of women are second-class.
Beauty is relative. There is not a absolute beauty in the world. My girlfriend has a very small eyes. Korean dont like these eyes commonly,but filipinos teacher envied these eyes because teachers eyes were very big. How we can define the beauty?
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Hello there^_^. Again, thank you so much for sending your compostion. I think beauty is within^_^
T. Faye
Do you think Koreans generally look better today than when cosmetic surgery wasn\'t as common?
>>>CORRECTI think each race has a own beauty.
>>>I think each race has its own beauty.
For example, european has a bloned hair and big nose, filipino has a big eyes and brown skin, korean has a round face and black hair.
>>>For example, Europeans have blonde hair and big nose. Filipinos have big eyes and brown skin/complexion and Koreans have round faces and black hair.
>>>For example, Europeans have blonde hair and big nose, Filipinos have big eyes and brown skin while Koreans have round places and black hair.
It is a very characteristic beauty in the world.
>>>Everyone in this world has a diffrent beauty/characteristic.But, because of the plastic surgery, Korean women have been losing their own beauty.
>>>But,because of the plastic surgery, Korean women have been losing their natural beauty.
Of course, their are a lot of beautiful women on the street.
>>>Of course, there are a lot of beautiful women on the street.
They are so pretty but have a same face: sharply chin, big eyes and high nose...
>>>They are so pretty but have the same faces,; sharp chin, big eyes and high nose.
They think they are so pretty.
>>>CORRECT
But I think they just follow europeans beauty.
>>>But I think they just followed European beauty.
>>>But I think they just imitated European beauty.
Point of europeans view, these kind of women are second-class.
>>>For Europeans, these kind of women are second-class.Beauty is relative.
>>>CORRECT
There is not a absolute beauty in the world.
>>>There is no absolute beauty in this world.
My girlfriend has a very small eyes.
>>>My girlfriend has very small eyes.
Korean dont like these eyes commonly,but filipinos teacher envied these eyes because teachers eyes were very big.
>>>Koreans don\'t usually like these kind of eyes, but Filipino teachers envies these eyes because their eyes are very big.
How we can define the beauty?
>>>How can we define beauty?
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