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2012-04-21 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Do you think Koreans generally look better today than when cosmetic surgery wasn't as common? I think each race has a own beauty. For example, european has a bloned hair and big nose, filipino has a big eyes and brown skin, korean has a round face and black hair. It is a very characteristic beauty in the world. But, because of the plastic surgery, Korean women have been losing their own beauty. Of course, their are a lot of beautiful women on the street. They are so pretty but have a same face: sharply chin, big eyes and high nose...They think they are so pretty. But I think they just follow europeans beauty. Point of europeans view, these kind of women are second-class. Beauty is relative. There is not a absolute beauty in the world. My girlfriend has a very small eyes. Korean dont like these eyes commonly,but filipinos teacher envied these eyes because teachers eyes were very big. How we can define the beauty?

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Hello there^_^. Again, thank you so much for sending your compostion. I think beauty is within^_^ T. Faye Do you think Koreans generally look better today than when cosmetic surgery wasn\'t as common? >>>CORRECTI think each race has a own beauty. >>>I think each race has its own beauty. For example, european has a bloned hair and big nose, filipino has a big eyes and brown skin, korean has a round face and black hair. >>>For example, Europeans have blonde hair and big nose. Filipinos have big eyes and brown skin/complexion and Koreans have round faces and black hair. >>>For example, Europeans have blonde hair and big nose, Filipinos have big eyes and brown skin while Koreans have round places and black hair. It is a very characteristic beauty in the world. >>>Everyone in this world has a diffrent beauty/characteristic.But, because of the plastic surgery, Korean women have been losing their own beauty. >>>But,because of the plastic surgery, Korean women have been losing their natural beauty. Of course, their are a lot of beautiful women on the street. >>>Of course, there are a lot of beautiful women on the street. They are so pretty but have a same face: sharply chin, big eyes and high nose... >>>They are so pretty but have the same faces,; sharp chin, big eyes and high nose. They think they are so pretty. >>>CORRECT But I think they just follow europeans beauty. >>>But I think they just followed European beauty. >>>But I think they just imitated European beauty. Point of europeans view, these kind of women are second-class. >>>For Europeans, these kind of women are second-class.Beauty is relative. >>>CORRECT There is not a absolute beauty in the world. >>>There is no absolute beauty in this world. My girlfriend has a very small eyes. >>>My girlfriend has very small eyes. Korean dont like these eyes commonly,but filipinos teacher envied these eyes because teachers eyes were very big. >>>Koreans don\'t usually like these kind of eyes, but Filipino teachers envies these eyes because their eyes are very big. How we can define the beauty? >>>How can we define beauty?

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