Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Personally, I really like the space called a cafe. If I were to run my own business, I would like to run a bakery cafe that sells bread and coffee. I want to make the inside of the coffee shop a space with warm tone lighting with ivory and brown. Nowadays, a lot of unmanned cafes have also been created. An unmanned cafe costs less labor and costs, and it is convenient to pay right in without standing in line. I think it is okay to have an unmanned cafe because of this convenience.
강사 첨삭
Coffee shops are popular. For me, they don’t go out of style. People continuously patronize these because people treat coffee and tea as essential things in their daily lives.
-Khai
Personally, I really like the space called a cafe.
>> I like the space called a cafe.
If I were to run my own business, I would like to run a bakery cafe that sells bread and coffee.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> If I am given a chance to have my own business, I would like to run a bakery cafe that sells bread and coffee.
I want to make the inside of the coffee shop a space with warm tone lighting with ivory and brown.
>> I want to make the coffee shop a space with a warm tone lighting with ivory and brown.
Nowadays, a lot of unmanned cafes have also been created.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> Nowadays, there are lots of established unmanned cafes.
An unmanned cafe costs less labor and costs, and it is convenient to pay right in without standing in line.
>> An unmanned cafe’s operating costs are way less because there will be no labor costs. It is also convenient to pay without standing in line.
I think it is okay to have an unmanned cafe because of this convenience.
>> CORRECT
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