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학생이 쓴 원문
Yes. Of course, I am well aware of my personality. And my personality changes as I get older and changes over time. I have rare memories of my environment or friends since I was 6 years old. When I was very [이름], I loved playing outside with my friends. My personality was bright and I had a lot of friends. As I became a senior, I hung out with a small number of close friends rather than meeting many friends. I didn\'t talk much, and I liked listening to my friends more. From my 20s to early 40s, I lived a hectic life while taking care of my children. Now that I am 50 years old, my life is stabilized, and I feel good to have some time to do sports or learn. I love myself now.
강사 첨삭
I believe you have been through a lot and now, you truly deserve some time to take care of yourself. Thank you for sharing, Mia! Well done!
-Khai
Yes.
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Of course, I am well aware of my personality.
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>> I am very much aware of my personality.
And my personality changes as I get older and changes over time.
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>> And my personality changes as I age.
I have rare memories of my environment or friends since I was 6 years old.
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When I was very [이름], I loved playing outside with my friends.
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>> I loved playing outside with my friends when I was very [이름].
My personality was bright and I had a lot of friends.
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>> I had a lively character and interacted with many friends.
As I became a senior, I hung out with a small number of close friends rather than meeting many friends.
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>> As I become older, I prefer hanging out with a few people.
I didn\'t talk much, and I liked listening to my friends more.
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>> I prefer listening to my friends than talking.
From my 20s to early 40s, I lived a hectic life while taking care of my children.
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>> When I was in my early 20s to 40s, I had a busy life as I was taking care of my children.
Now that I am 50 years old, my life is stabilized, and I feel good to have some time to do sports or learn.
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>> Currently I am 50 years old and stable. I feel good to have some time to do sports or learn.
I love myself now.
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