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2024-04-12 · 첨삭 강사 Khai

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The most important thing my parents have taught me is sincerity. The power to support my family is their hard work. Their sacrifices and dedication help us grow up in a happy and comfortable family. They help us grow up in a comfortable and happy family through financial support, and they help us grow and develop through time and emotional support.

강사 첨삭

I agree that sincerity is one of the important things that parents should teach their kids. It is a trait that should be valued and to be lived on. Thank you, Mia.
-Khai
The most important thing my parents have taught me is sincerity. 

>> CORRECT
OR

>> Sincerity is the most important thing my parents taught me.

The power to support my family is their hard work. 

>> CORRECT

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>> My ability to support my family is due to my parents’ hard work.

Their sacrifices and dedication help us grow up in a happy and comfortable family. 

>> Their sacrifices and dedication helped us grow into a happy and comfortable family. 

They help us grow up in a comfortable and happy family through financial support, and they help us grow and develop through time and emotional support.
>> They raised us in a comfortable and happy family through financial and emotional support.

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