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Gemma thank you for your compliment!
I\'ll keep working on essays and trying to be accurate.
Have nice weekends!
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Hi there Diego~!^^ It\'s great to know that you\'re always enthusiastic when completing your writings! Continue to have a well-developed vocabulary.>>> TEACHER GEMMAIn many situations, people who break the law should be warned instead of punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? It is a hard question to answer. >>> CORRECT~!^^Law should be executed in fair condition.>>> CORRECT~!^^OR>>> Law should be executed justly. However I believe some exceptions for minorities.>>> However, I believe there are some exceptions for minorities.
First, minors who is not able to judge their offence, crimes seriously should be warned. >>> CORRECT~!^^They can be educated rather than punished.>>> They could be educated rather than punished. It is hard to regard them as a matured citizen in society. >>> CORRECT~!^^They need to learn how to behave as a loyal citizen who respect individual rights and obligation that society requires. >>> CORRECT~!^^Also it should not be done as a short, single action.>>> CORRECT~!^^It should be evaluated several times and supervised continuously.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Secondly, however, law should be executed differently by the gravity of offences.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Some crimes such as murder, rape, dealing or manufacturing drugs must be punished.>>> CORRECT~!^^It is not acceptable for public justice.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Heavy crimes are destructive and fatal against social structure. >>> CORRECT~!^^No mercy is allowed. >>> CORRECT~!^^Damage caused by heavy crimes cannot be restored. >>> CORRECT~!^^It must pay price whether criminal\'s age or situation.>>> They would pay the bail despite of their age. Criminals should be separated from the society to prevent other crimes.>>> CORRECT~!^^ As the law is invention and promises of the society, it contains errors. >>> As the law was made and pledged by the society, it contains errors. Law should be changed as time passes.>>> The law should be changed as time passes by. As values and cultures are flowable, law should follow them. >>> CORRECT~!^^The judgement about warning or punishments need to follow social opinions.>>> CORRECT~!^^
First, minors who is not able to judge their offence, crimes seriously should be warned. >>> CORRECT~!^^They can be educated rather than punished.>>> They could be educated rather than punished. It is hard to regard them as a matured citizen in society. >>> CORRECT~!^^They need to learn how to behave as a loyal citizen who respect individual rights and obligation that society requires. >>> CORRECT~!^^Also it should not be done as a short, single action.>>> CORRECT~!^^It should be evaluated several times and supervised continuously.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Secondly, however, law should be executed differently by the gravity of offences.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Some crimes such as murder, rape, dealing or manufacturing drugs must be punished.>>> CORRECT~!^^It is not acceptable for public justice.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Heavy crimes are destructive and fatal against social structure. >>> CORRECT~!^^No mercy is allowed. >>> CORRECT~!^^Damage caused by heavy crimes cannot be restored. >>> CORRECT~!^^It must pay price whether criminal\'s age or situation.>>> They would pay the bail despite of their age. Criminals should be separated from the society to prevent other crimes.>>> CORRECT~!^^ As the law is invention and promises of the society, it contains errors. >>> As the law was made and pledged by the society, it contains errors. Law should be changed as time passes.>>> The law should be changed as time passes by. As values and cultures are flowable, law should follow them. >>> CORRECT~!^^The judgement about warning or punishments need to follow social opinions.>>> CORRECT~!^^
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