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Our siblings didn’t get in touch often untill
We were in our fifties.
We couldn’t afford to pay the money for gathering and traveling.
Because raising our children.
We had met once a year sometimes.
But now our children became adult.
So we have time to meet although we are not close.
We realised realationship that is connected with blood can make coorporation.
I want to my children how important family is.
강사 첨삭
Ms [이름]ny!
One of the best things we can do with our family is to get together as much as we can. While everyone is still strong and healthy.
I remember one thing that I read: \"Families have to start getting back together for [이름]day dinner and family reunions; not just for funerals\" -- this is on point! Enjoy the day!
Aki~
Our siblings didn’t get in touch often until We were in our fifties.
>>> Our siblings didn’t get in touch often until we were in our fifties.
We couldn’t afford to pay the money for gathering and traveling.
>>> We couldn\'t afford to pay for a gathering and travel.
Because raising our children.
>>> Because we have to raise our children.
We had met once a year sometimes.
>>> So we sometimes meet only once a year.
But now our children became adult.
>>> But now our children are adults.
So we have time to meet although we are not close.
>>> We get a chance to meet even though we are far from each other.
We realised realationship that is connected with blood can make corporation.
>>> We realised relationship that is connected with blood can make a corporation.
I want to my children how important family is.
>>> I want my chidlren to know how important a family is.
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