Homework

2024-06-25 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree to exist the death penalty. People who commit crime against the law have to be afraid of result. Generous punishment is caused by another hideous crimes . These days people kill others easily although they are normal people. This situation is came from insensitivity of crimes and its punishments.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Ms. [이름]ny!
The effectiveness of the death penalty in solving a crime is still in process. My thoughts remain on the worst punishment that I mentioned before.
Thank you for giving your thoughts here. Enjoy the day!
Aki~

I agree to exist the death penalty.
>>> I agree that the death penalty will exist again.

People who commit crime against the law have to be afraid of result.
>>> People who commit crimes against the law have to be afraid of results.

Generous punishment is caused by another hideous crimes .
>>> Generous punishment is caused by other hideous crimes.

These days people kill others easily although they are normal people.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> These days,  people kill others easily even without the intention.

This situation is came from insensitivity of crimes and its punishments.
>>> This situation came from the insensitivity of crimes and their punishments.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·