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2024-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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if you go to the gym and ride a station bike regually You can lose weight in a short period of time. Excessive dieting is not good for your health. but ,we need to control our diet. n the past, if you excel at one thing, you get a job. But not these days. She is already excell at singing. though, I don\'t stop trying. I presently like the actor since I fell in love with him in the movie. before i live in studio apartment, i want to be live in there but now is not

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Mi [이름]!

I\'m sending you back your corrected essay. Thank you for sending it. Please go through the correction provided. Speak to you again next week! Good night! 


Cheers,
Jean~~




                                 


                     Make sentences using the words and expressions below, including the conjunctions given:


if you go to the gym and ride a station bike regually You can lose weight in a short period of time.
>> If you go to the gym and ride a stationary bike regularly, you can lose weight in a short period of time.

Excessive dieting is not good for your health.
>> CORRECT~~

but ,we need to control our diet.
>> But we still need to control our diet. 

n the past, if you excel at one thing, you get a job. But not these days.
>> In the past, you excelled at one thing, you could get a job, but not these days. 

She is already excell at singing.
>> She is already excellent at singing.
>> OR: She already excels at singing. 

though, I don\'t stop trying.
>> OR: Though I don\'t stop trying, I still can\'t achieve my goal. 

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