Homework
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Q: Why do you think it\'s necessary to have salary raise or bonus?
A: I think it\'s because every people always get more greedy.
I think most people tend to get more greedy everyday, because they have a lot of things they want to do, and they need money for that.
Also, I think it\'s necessary because they need more money by the time go.
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Hi, [이름]!
2. I think most people tend to get more greedy everyday, because they have a lot of things they want to do, and they need money for that.
3. Also, I think it\'s necessary because they need more money by the time go.
Thank you for doing your homework.
~T. Divina^^
Here are some corrections:
1. I think it\'s because every people always get more greedy.
>>I think it\'s because every person always gets greedier.
2. I think most people tend to get more greedy everyday, because they have a lot of things they want to do, and they need money for that.
>>I think most people tend to get greedier every day, because they want to do a lot of things that need money.
3. Also, I think it\'s necessary because they need more money by the time go.
>>Also, I think it\'s necessary because they need more money by the time goes.
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