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Thank you for concerning me.
I have ever treated me with acupuncture.
We have many oriental hospital too.
Needle can give impact to my nerves.
So It can help me a little to numb my body.
I think there is nothing my deases can treat completely.
But there are many other things to relive my numb.
Massage,taking a bath, exercising include acupuncture.
I satisfied with that.
Fortunately, I can afford to do that.
If I am greedy more I can lost another thing.
I think everyone has the same fortune and It might be my destiny.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [이름]ny!
Thank you for sharing this.
There are certain illnesses where specific treatments are done. you mentioned that you have a disease, then take care of your body We only have one life, live it to the full but do not compromise your health :)
T. Aki~
Thank you for concerning me.
>>> Thank you for being concerned about me.
I have ever treated me with acupuncture.
>>> I haven\'t tried being treated with acupuncture.
We have many oriental hospitals too.
>>> CORRECT!
Needle can give impact to my nerves.
>>> Needles can have an impact on my nerves.
So It can help me a little to numb my body.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>> So it can bring numbness to my body.
I think there is nothing my deases can treat completely.
>>> I think there is nothing that can treat my disease completely.
But there are many other things to relive my numb.
>>> But there are many other things to relieve my numbness.
Massage,taking a bath, exercising include acupuncture.
>>> Like having a message, taking a bath, exercising, and acupuncture can help too.
I satisfied with that.
>> I am satisfied with that.
Fortunately, I can afford to do that.
>>> CORRECT!
If I am greedy more I can lost another thing.
>>> If I am greedy more I can lose another thing.
I think everyone has the same fortune and It might be my destiny.
>>> CORRECT!
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