homework
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In my opinion, Changwon is the city with the best weather.
It is located in the south of Korea.that\'s why there\'s a lot of warm wind.
But it\'s not cold either.And it is near [이름]hae, where the sea is famous. So it is not too hot compared to Daegu.
It\'s rare that the weather is bad because there are many walking trails with trees.
I moved a lot because of my dad\'s job. But there\'s no better place to live than Changwon.
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I\'m sending you another corrected essay, Mi [이름]! I appreciate your sending it. Please go over the corrections and alternative expressions provided.
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Jean~~
Which region of your country has the best weather? What is it like there?
In my opinion, Changwon is the city with the best weather.
>> OR: Personally, I think Changwon has the best weather.
It is located in the south of Korea.that\'s why there\'s a lot of warm wind.
>> It\'s located in the southern part of the country that\'s why there\'s a lot of warm wind.
But it\'s not cold either.
>> CORRECT~~
And it is near [이름]hae, where the sea is famous. So it is not too hot compared to Daegu.
>> And it is near [이름]hae, where the sea is famous, which is why it\'s not too hot compared to Daegu.
It\'s rare that the weather is bad because there are many walking trails with trees.
>> The weather is rarely bad because there are many walking trails with trees.
I moved a lot because of my dad\'s job. But there\'s no better place to live than Changwon.
>> I moved a lot because of my dad\'s job, but there\'s no better place to live than Changwon.
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