Homework :
학생이 쓴 원문
When i was eight years old, I had play the piano and go academy for 10 years.
Playing piano is so exciting but when i watch a guitar player video, The guitar looks cooler.
So i bought a guitar 6 month ago, but i can\'t play the guitar well. Because I don\'t have a much time for learn.
My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different method for learn instrument. I think that Learning in the academy is best. But It is expensive and need a lot of travel time. So I chose a youtube. There are many teacher in youtube platform and so nice.
choosing how to learn is important but Practicing stedily is more important for imporve ability.
강사 첨삭
Great work, [이름]! Please focus on expanding your vocabulary and varying sentence lengths in your writing.
So i bought a guitar 6 month ago, but i can\'t play the guitar well. Because I don\'t have a much time for learn.
My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different method for learn instrument.
choosing how to learn is important but Practicing stedily is more important for imporve ability.
- Teacher Angela
When i was eight years old, I had play the piano and go academy for 10 years.
>> When I was eight years old, I played the piano and went to an academy for 10 years.
Playing piano is so exciting but when i watch a guitar player video, The guitar looks cooler.
>> Playing the piano is exciting, but when I watch a guitar player\'s video, the guitar looks cooler
So i bought a guitar 6 month ago, but i can\'t play the guitar well. Because I don\'t have a much time for learn.
>> So, I bought a guitar six months ago, but I can\'t play it well because I don\'t have much time to learn.
My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different method for learn instrument.
>> My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different methods in learning an instrument.
I think that Learning in the academy is best. But It is expensive and need a lot of travel time.
>> I think that learning at an academy is the best option, but it is expensive and requires a lot of travel time
So I chose a youtube. There are many teacher in youtube platform and so nice.
>> So, I chose YouTube. There are many teachers on the YouTube platform, and they are very good.
choosing how to learn is important but Practicing stedily is more important for imporve ability.
>> Choosing how to learn is important, but practicing steadily is more important for improving your ability
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