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Are you an ambitious person? What career goals do you have?
I used to have ambitions. I wanted to be a person who is good at studying and has a healthy body. So I studied hard and exercised hard. As a result, I got good grades and my body was very thin. But after working, I met a world different from that i immagine. and so there were many setbacks and difficulties. Society was sharper than I thought. I\'m going to start my social life again now, but I\'m afraid. Now I want to live safely
like other . this is my career goal to meet my fit job and endure it and do it well like others.
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Good evening to you there and speak to you again tomorrow!
Cheers,
Jean~~
Are you an ambitious person? What career goals do you have?
I used to have ambitions.
>> OR: I used to be ambitious.
I wanted to be a person who is good at studying and has a healthy body.
>> OR: I hoped to be well-educated and healthy.
So I studied hard and exercised hard.
>> OR: That\'s why I was a studious student and did exercises.
As a result, I got good grades and my body was very thin.
>> CORRECT~~
But after working, I met a world different from that i immagine. and so there were many setbacks and difficulties.
>> But after working, I met a world different from what I imagined and so I encountered many setbacks and difficulties.
Society was sharper than I thought. I\'m going to start my social life again now, but I\'m afraid.
>> CORRECT~~
Now I want to live safely
like other .
>> I now want to just live safely like others.
this is my career goal to meet my fit job and endure it and do it well like others.
>> My career goal is to find a job that fits me, endure the difficulties, and do it well like others.
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