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2024-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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Last year was the worst year for me because I failed an exam related to other that is different with my major. That was something I had really wanted to pursue and had prepared for two years. And surprisingly, the difference was just 0.5 points. Afterwards, I had to reconsider my future. I realized that I didn’t want a job in engineering, which made me feel frustrated about my life. However, I knew I had to make a realistic decision about my career. So, I decided to return to my university and focus on a different path in major. Now, I am satisfied with my new career plan in regulatory affairs for medical devices, not a development. That experience is the most difficult plan that I had made ever.

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Last year was the worst year for me because I failed an exam related to other that is different with my major.
>>Last year was the worst year for me because I failed an exam related to others that is different from my major.
OR
>> I failed an exam relating to others that was unrelated to my major last year, which made it the worst year of my life.
 That was something I had really wanted to pursue and had prepared for two years.
Or
>>I had spent the last two years preparing for that, and it was something I truly wanted to pursue.
 And surprisingly, the difference was just 0.5 points.
>>Correct
 Afterwards, I had to reconsider my future.
>>  Afterward, I had to reconsider my future.
 I realized that I didn’t want a job in engineering, which made me feel frustrated about my life. 
However, I knew I had to make a realistic decision about my career. So, I decided to return to my university and focus on a different path in major. Now, I am satisfied with my new career plan in regulatory affairs for medical devices, not a development. 
>>Correct
That experience is the most difficult plan that I had made ever.
>> That experience was the most difficult plan that I had ever made. 

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