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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: Imagine you have won ten million dollars. Who will you tell? What will you do with the money?
If I have ten million dollars, I wouldn\'t tell anybody. and I will call my sisters \"let\'s meet front of the Dior shop\" this is our code. Andthen I will buy Dior bag to my sisters. Sometimes we have been talk about this. If anybody have a ten million, we buying dior bag by us. Also I will saving all amount, after few year I will squared up with large bank loan. Meanwhile I will work and no longer to angry
With all the money squared up after the bank\'s debt I will buy building I will spend comfortable time with receive a monthly rent. This is my final goal!!
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! It\'s so cute that you and your sisters have a code. I actually have two sisters and I think we should also think of our code for that. I hope luck comes to you soon! Thank you for sharing~
-T. Sonny
If I have ten million dollars, I wouldn\'t tell anybody.
>>If I had ten million dollars, I wouldn\'t tell anybody.
and I will call my sisters \"let\'s meet front of the Dior shop\" this is our code.
>>I will call my sisters and say: \"Let\'s meet in front of the Dior shop\", which is our code.
Andthen I will buy Dior bag to my sisters.
>>Then I will buy my sisters a Dior bag.
Sometimes we have been talk about this.
>>Sometimes, we talk about this.
If anybody have a ten million, we buying dior bag by us.
>>If any of us would have ten million dollars, we should buy us a Dior bag.
Also I will saving all amount, after few year I will squared up with large bank loan.
>>Also, I will save all of it, and after few years, it will square up a large bank loan.
Meanwhile I will work and no longer to angry
>>Meanwhile, I will work and never be angry.
With all the money squared up after the bank\'s debt I will buy building I will spend comfortable time with receive a monthly rent.
>>Meanwhile, I will work and never be angry.
With all the money squared up after the bank\'s debt I will buy building I will spend comfortable time with receive a monthly rent.
>>With all the money squared up and cleared my debts, I will buy a building and spend a comfortable time while receiving a monthly rent.
This is my final goal!!
>>Correct!
OR. This is my end goal.
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