Homework~
학생이 쓴 원문
Someone say that eating an apple in the morning is Golden apple. Let me explain why.
There is abundant in fiber. So it helps prevent constipation and obesity. Also when you eat an apple in the morning, it helps elimination of waste matter from the body. For this reason, it’s good for diet.
For women, it’s very nice produce. Because there is rich in Vitamin C. It prevents cancer and cold. Also it’s good for skin, so it helps prevent freckle, blemishes and skin aging.
When you eat an apple, it’s better to eat with pill. Since there are a lot of Vitamin in pill. So after washing an apple clearly, you can eat it.
But it’s bad to eat an apple at night. Because it contains lots of acid. At night, there is empty in the stomach, so if you eat an apple at night, the stomach can be got hurt by acid. It could make gastritis.
Then, eating an apple in the morning is that help digestion. And you can have a good skin, skinny body. Be a beautiful woman!
강사 첨삭
Dear [이름],
Ah, it\'s about the apple! My only question is about this pill that you\'re saying, which is better taken with an apple. I might remember to ask you that tomorrow in our class.
You have meaningful sentences so I just changed a few words. You may want to read your composition again.
Take care, I\'ll see you tomorrow!
teacher Valery
Someone say that eating an apple in the morning is Golden apple.
>> Someone said that eating an apple in the morning is helpful.
Let me explain why.
>> Correct!There is abundant in fiber.
>> An apple is abundant in fiber.
So it helps prevent constipation and obesity.
>> Correct!
Also when you eat an apple in the morning, it helps elimination of waste matter from the body.
>> Also when you eat an apple in the morning, it helps in the elimination of waste matter from the body.
For this reason, it’s good for diet. >> Correct! or
>> For this reason, it\'s also good for diet.
For women, it’s very nice produce.
>> For women, it\'s a very nice routine to eat an apple in the morning.
Because there is rich in Vitamin C.
>> Because it is rich in Vitamin C.
It prevents cancer and cold.
>> It prevents cancer and the common cold.
Also it’s good for skin, so it helps prevent freckle, blemishes and skin aging.>> Also it\'s good for the skin, so it helps to prevent freckles, blemishes and skin aging.
When you eat an apple, it’s better to eat with pill.
>> When you eat an apple, it\'s better to eat it with a pill.
Since there are a lot of Vitamin in pill.
>> Since there are a lot of vitamins in a pill.
So after washing an apple clearly, you can eat it. >> So after washing an apple very well, you can have it with the pill.
But it’s bad to eat an apple at night.
>> Correct!
Because it contains lots of acid.
>> Correct!
At night, there is empty in the stomach, so if you eat an apple at night, the stomach can be got hurt by acid.
>> At night, the stomach would be empty. If you eat an apple at night, the stomach can be hurt by the acid from the apple.
It could make gastritis.
>> It could result to gastritis. Then, eating an apple in the morning is that help digestion.
>> Eating an apple in the morning helps in digestion.
And you can have a good skin, skinny body.
>> You also can have a good skin and skinny body.
Be a beautiful woman!
>> You can be a beautiful woman with an apple!
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