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2025-01-03 · 첨삭 강사 Trixia

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Q: Do you think social activities are more important for children or adults? Why? A: I think social activities are more important for children. Social activities can make children know how to interact with others and more about the relationship with others in society. But still, I think social activities are also important for adults because people can\'t live alone.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
Great effort! You’ve explained your opinion well. Work on refining sentence flow and word choice to make your ideas even clearer.
~ Teacher Trixia

CONTENT:
I think social activities are more important for children.
- I think social activities are more important for children. 
Social activities can make children know how to interact with others and more about the relationship with others in society.
- Social activities help children learn how to interact with others and understand relationships in society. 
But still, I think social activities are also important for adults because people can\'t live alone.
- However, I think social activities are also important for adults because people can’t live alone.

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