Homework
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I concede effect of treatment hair at home.
We can buy some tools and haircare cream at the market and they are useful for our hair shiny.
Their effect of clinic at home is the same as hair salons one\'s.
We only just have to do is investing my time for manage my hair.
But I haven\'t done doing it although I already bought manything for it.
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Ms. [이름]ny!
DIY is so common these days. With the help YouTube and Tik Tok, one can do hair treatment. However, we need to remember that Salon hair stylists are professional and they have a lot of knowledge especially on complicated hair treatments.
Aki~
I concede effect of treatment hair at home.
>>> I am concerned with the effect of hair treatment at home.
We can buy some tools and haircare cream at the market and they are useful for our hair shiny.
>>> We can buy some tools and haircare cream at the market and they are useful to make our hair shiny.
Their effect of clinic at home is the same as hair salons one\'s.
>>> The effect of home treatment is the same as the hai salons.
We only just have to do is investing my time for manage my hair.
>>> We only need to invest our time in managing our hair.
But I haven\'t done doing it although I already bought manything for it.
>>> Although I haven\'t tried it yet, I already bought a lot of things like this.
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