Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Someone says that learning at school is a must. They say that learning at school is something they will use in their careers and that school can be fundamental to developing it.
However, someone says that learning at school is not necessary. It is said that learning at school is not necessary to enjoy everyday life.
I think it is essential to learn at school. This is because I don\'t learn general things such as math and science at school, but I also learn social life.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Lee! Thanks for doing your homework! Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and effectively presents your argument. You’ve shown strong analytical skills and made good connections between ideas. While your essay is well-developed, you could strengthen the clarity of your argument by incorporating more specific examples in the second paragraph.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Someone says that learning at school is a must.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
They say that learning at school is something they will use in their careers and that school can be fundamental to developing it.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, someone says that learning at school is not necessary.
However, someone says that learning at school is not necessary.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It is said that learning at school is not necessary to enjoy everyday life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
I think it is essential to learn at school.
I think it is essential to learn at school.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
This is because I don\'t learn general things such as math and science at school, but I also learn from social life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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