homework
학생이 쓴 원문
The reason why people work a lot is that their economic power is weakened that much.
Economic power here does not enrich our lives, but it refers to the money we spend and the economic ability we earn to enjoy life.
We have made economic progress, but we don\'t make much money to enrich our lives, which is why we take a lot of working hours.
To do this, bosses need to comply with the law and collaborate with workers.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Lee~!^^ You did an excellent job establishing the context and clearly outlining the central theme of your essay. By presenting a thoughtful opening, you set a strong foundation for the argument that follows, making it easy for the reader to understand the direction of your analysis. The way you framed the issue not only engages but also encourages a deeper exploration of the topic in the body of the essay.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The reason why people work a lot is that their economic power is weakened that much.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Economic power here does not enrich our lives, but it refers to the money we spend and the economic ability we earn to enjoy life.
Economic power here does not enrich our lives, but it refers to the money we spend and the economic ability we earn to enjoy life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
We have made economic progress, but we don\'t make much money to enrich our lives, which is why we take a lot of working hours.
We have made economic progress, but we don\'t make much money to enrich our lives, which is why we take a lot of working hours.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
To do this, bosses need to comply with the law and collaborate with workers.
To do this, bosses need to comply with the law and collaborate with workers.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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